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Midnight Scribbler's avatar

Wow. This is beautiful, the impact of your words hits hard.

Paul W. B. Marsden's avatar

Thank you Midnight Scribbler. Much appreciated.

Aaliya's avatar

So beautiful and such vivid imagery !

Paul W. B. Marsden's avatar

Thank you so much Aaliya. Much appreciated.

Monica Fernandes's avatar

This was very good. Great descriptive snippets. Short lines. Skinny poem. It does read like the attention span is short. I can relate.

Paul W. B. Marsden's avatar

Thank you so much Mónica.

Yes I was trying to create a role model in my poem so that I might lose weight myself!

I doubt it will work! 😅

Monica Fernandes's avatar

If it works, let me know. I’ll start writing skinny poems daily.

Stephanie M. Vargo's avatar

Very emotional. Visual imagery was excellent. Brings home the power of war.

Paul W. B. Marsden's avatar

Thank you Stephanie that means a lot.

Much appreciated for taking the time to leave the kind comments.

Karen Davis's avatar

I really like this one. I was in that field with you, staring at a glorious sky, while somewhere else, total destruction. But I didn't care. For the moment.

Paul W. B. Marsden's avatar

Thank you Karen. I was in the Place de la République in Strasbourg.

Lying on the grass surrounded by flowers and stone architecture of the Palaus du Rhin but all I could see, in my mind’s eye, was the utter mindless war destroying lives in Iran.